Hi Everyone. It's a pleasure to be here, standing, or should I say, typing in for Gabrielle. As we all know, sometimes life gets a little to hectic and we have to take a step back. I guess Gab is having one of those weeks. I'll be filling in until next Friday.
While I'm at the controls, I thought I'd ask for a little help from all of you. A dear friend of mine is opening a Day Spa. She has asked me to write a poem she could have framed to display in the spa. She asked that if reference God, friends, women, and that her dream is coming true. Here's what I've got. Any suggestions?
Ode to Ana’s Dream
New Awakenings Day Spa
An exquisite dream,
Was fulfilled it seems,
By Gods warm embrace.
Reward for her faith.
In the company of friends,
Femininity shall mend,
Bringing forth these rare flowers,
Meant to bask in Gods Powers.
These rooms shall be filled,
With laughter and tears.
May joy, peace and grace,
Complete this fair space.
True beauty is not skin deep.
Into our souls it doth creep.
Thus know you’ll never repent,
This precious time here you’ve spent.
Marianne Fuchs
April 22, 2008
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4 comments:
What a beautiful gift you are giving your friend!
I want to check it out!
I'll ruminate...it stands so well on its own...
great guest hosting!!!!!
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"seep" rather than "creep" comes to mind--today's venacular(sp) commands a negative presentation.
the very last line, I'm having a hard time processing "precious time"......
thankyou Marianne, poet.
Thanks Kackerbe,
I do like seep better than creep. It has a softer feel. Let me know what you find wrong with the last line. I wanted it to reflect on the leasure time one would spend at a spa.
I've tried changing the last line to, "Precious time here you have spent." Does that flow any better?
Marianne,
scratch, my suggestion of changing the last line...I don't know what I was thinking...
the poem is wonderful!
it is a delight to read espy. with how you blended all the elements important to Ana...
you have a gift woman! :)
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